Some people believe that youngsters should be required to have full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. What extent do you agree or disagree ?
It
is argue
that having Change the verb form
is argued
a
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an
education
full time
should be a requirement for young people until they are at least 18 years old. I totally agree with this
statement and in this
essay
I will give you the main reasons why the principal goal of youngsters should be Add a comma
essay,
education
.
One of the reasons why children should be focus
on Change the verb form
be focused
be focusing
school
is because is their future. They need a good scores
in elementary, middle Correct the article-noun agreement
a good score
good scores
school
and high school
in order to go to college. The university requirements are hard, therefore
only a small percentage of student applications are accepted. For instance
, students have to attend extracurricular classes such
as sport
, language Fix the agreement mistake
sports
program
or art to achieve extra Fix the agreement mistake
programs
point
in their Fix the agreement mistake
points
curriculm
for college.
Another reason I agree with the Correct your spelling
curriculum
full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
education
for juveniles is that they don't need distractions such
as part job
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part-time
time
or other extracurricular activity
. They only have one Fix the agreement mistake
activities
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responsibility
responsability
, Correct your spelling
responsibility
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which is
is
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which is
Fix the infinitive
to go
go
to Fix the infinitive
to go
school
, if they have distraccions
they will have low Correct your spelling
distractions
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apply
their
scores in classes or quit Correct pronoun usage
apply
Change preposition
apply
to
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apply
school
. A clear example of this
is that in USA
16 years Correct article usage
the USA
old
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16-year-old
teeneagers
are able to have a Correct your spelling
teenagers
part
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part-time
time
job in stores or fast food restaurants, However
they cannot Add a comma
However,
with
the Change preposition
apply
school
projects and job
. Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
Therefore
a large proportion of learners quit school
before they finish college.
In conclusion, people believe that a requirement for juveniles less than 18 years old should be have
a full-Fix the infinitive
to have
time
education
. In my opinion, I agree with this
statement because young people should be focus
on their studies in order to have a career in the future and is Change the verb form
be focused
be focusing
they
only Correct pronoun usage
their
responsability
.Correct your spelling
responsibility
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