Some people believe that the academic success of students depends on good teachers at schools. Others think that it depends on the attitude and determination of the students. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Whether
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'
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in studies relies on diligent
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or
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' mindset and dedication towards academics influence their achievements, has become a debatable topic among people.
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good mentors facilitate the learning environment and mentees' thought processes
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determination play a significant role in achieving better grades, I think the cooperative efforts of both parties would enhance the academic performance of
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. On the one hand, proponents of having intellectual tutors emphasise that tutors create a conducive learning environment. To justify,
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encourage
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to comprehend the course content by creating an analytic ability, clarifying their doubts and adopting a simplified approach to assist
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in learning effectively.
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way influences
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to study, resulting in good grades.
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, most of the
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of all branches of Saint Xavier School in India get more than 80% marks in their finals
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year because their diligent
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have influenced them to study.
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, those
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the essence of
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of mind and perseverance of
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to
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academic
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claim that
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should be interested in studies. If
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have no desire to learn, they might not be able to understand the course material.
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may lead to failure in the examination even if they are intelligent.
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, perseverance is imperative to achieve academic
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. In my opinion, the blend of good
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and a positive mindset of
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creates a path for academic achievement.
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is because
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students
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are ready to comprehend the information, the tutors can disseminate the knowledge more effectively, and
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combined effort may result in a deep understanding of the course content.
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dual work ultimately leads to academic
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, had many
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and
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of the government schools in India not put effort into their studies, the
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would not be able to excel in the board examinations in 2023. In conclusion,
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opinions vary on the reason to get academic
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among
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, I believe, the joint efforts of
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and
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can result in acquiring excellent marks in the finals by
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.
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