The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The multiple maps compare the vast development of a museum's interior within a decade, between 1998 and 2008.
Overall
, there has been an introduction to a lot of new facilities, Linking Words
such
as a restaurant, a Linking Words
cafe
's sitting Use synonyms
area
, and fountains. Use synonyms
Moreover
, many places have exchanged their locations.
In 1998, the garden was located in the centre of the Linking Words
area
, with an entrance in the south, and a Use synonyms
cafe
in the north. Most of the areas were focused on the south region, Use synonyms
for instance
, a temporary Linking Words
exhibition
Use synonyms
room
and a shop on the western and eastern of the entrance, respectively. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, in the east of the shop, there was an Linking Words
area
separated into two, a WC in the upper part and a bags and coats Use synonyms
room
in the lower part. Use synonyms
While
for rest of the Linking Words
area
, which was the eastern and western side of the garden were permanent Use synonyms
exhibition
rooms.
In 2008, the attractions were concentrated in the middle and west, Use synonyms
while
the east was for permanent Linking Words
exhibition
rooms. Several new objects were built, Use synonyms
for example
, there were fountains in the garden and a Linking Words
cafe
sitting Use synonyms
area
just below the Use synonyms
cafe
. Use synonyms
Additionally
, the Linking Words
cafe
has been equipped with a WC on the right side, Use synonyms
whereas
the left side of the Linking Words
cafe
has been reconstructed into a new restaurant. Under the restaurant, there stood the temporary Use synonyms
exhibition
Use synonyms
room
. Use synonyms
Lastly
, the old temporary Linking Words
exhibition
Use synonyms
room
was redeveloped into two rooms, a bags and coats Use synonyms
room
and a shop.Use synonyms
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cafe, area, exhibition, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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