IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The multiple maps compare the vast development of a museum's interior within a decade, between 1998 and 2008.
Overall
Linking Words
, there has been an introduction to a lot of new facilities,
such
Linking Words
 as a restaurant, a
cafe
Use synonyms
's sitting
area
Use synonyms
, and fountains.
Moreover
Linking Words
, many places have exchanged their locations. In 1998, the garden was located in the centre of the
area
Use synonyms
, with an entrance in the south, and a
cafe
Use synonyms
 in the north. Most of the areas were focused on the south region,
for instance
Linking Words
, a temporary
exhibition
Use synonyms
room
Use synonyms
 and a shop on the western and eastern of the entrance, respectively.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, in the east of the shop, there was an
area
Use synonyms
 separated into two, a WC in the upper part and a bags and coats
room
Use synonyms
 in the lower part.
While
Linking Words
 for rest of the
area
Use synonyms
, which was the eastern and western side of the garden were permanent
exhibition
Use synonyms
 rooms. In 2008, the attractions were concentrated in the middle and west,
while
Linking Words
 the east was for permanent
exhibition
Use synonyms
 rooms. Several new objects were built,
for example
Linking Words
, there were fountains in the garden and a
cafe
Use synonyms
 sitting
area
Use synonyms
 just below the
cafe
Use synonyms
.
Additionally
Linking Words
, the
cafe
Use synonyms
 has been equipped with a WC on the right side,
whereas
Linking Words
 the left side of the
cafe
Use synonyms
 has been reconstructed into a new restaurant. Under the restaurant, there stood the temporary
exhibition
Use synonyms
room
Use synonyms
.
Lastly
Linking Words
, the old temporary
exhibition
Use synonyms
room
Use synonyms
 was redeveloped into two rooms, a bags and coats
room
Use synonyms
 and a shop.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words cafe, area, exhibition, room with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
What to do next:
Look at other essays: