The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The multiple maps compare the vast development of a museum's interior within a decade, between 1998 and 2008.
Overall
, there has been an introduction to a lot of new facilities,
such
as a restaurant, a
cafe
's sitting
area
, and fountains.
Moreover
, many places have exchanged their locations. In 1998, the garden was located in the centre of the
area
, with an entrance in the south, and a
cafe
in the north. Most of the areas were focused on the south region,
for instance
, a temporary
exhibition
room
and a shop on the western and eastern of the entrance, respectively.
Furthermore
, in the east of the shop, there was an
area
separated into two, a WC in the upper part and a bags and coats
room
in the lower part.
While
for rest of the
area
, which was the eastern and western side of the garden were permanent
exhibition
rooms. In 2008, the attractions were concentrated in the middle and west,
while
the east was for permanent
exhibition
rooms. Several new objects were built,
for example
, there were fountains in the garden and a
cafe
sitting
area
just below the
cafe
.
Additionally
, the
cafe
has been equipped with a WC on the right side,
whereas
the left side of the
cafe
has been reconstructed into a new restaurant. Under the restaurant, there stood the temporary
exhibition
room
.
Lastly
, the old temporary
exhibition
room
was redeveloped into two rooms, a bags and coats
room
and a shop.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cafe, area, exhibition, room with synonyms.
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