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The maps show the harbour in different times in 2000 and now

The maps show the harbour in different times in 2000 and now
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, there are new amenities were added and some features redeveloped and displaced
another
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one
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apply
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. The main road is located western part of Porth Harbour and
this
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 remained unchanged. in 2000, only one car park had an entrance from the main road but today, both car park entrances
had
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have
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 displaced only outside. Showers and toilets remained its place,
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 Marine(private yachts) and Fishing boats were changed with each other. In the Northern part,
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 one Dock was added
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 a public beach still serves tourists. Directly opposite of new dock built new cafe and shops just beyond to lifeboat.
also
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 here some redevelopment and construction in the south-east part. the road was extended and reached the Castle (disused) and that building was reconstructed and now it serves as
hotel
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a hotel
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.
And Public
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The public
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 beach that was located old castle
currently,
Wrong verb form
has been
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 transformed
to
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into
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private
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a private
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 beach for the hotel
To conclude
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, The harbour undergoes redevelopment and
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construction
constraction
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construction

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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