The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows the portions of female school-leavers going to higher education in 5 distinct countries including the UK, the USA,
Australia
, South Korea, and
France
between the period of 1980 and 2015.
Overall
, it can be seen that Australian
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dominated the
percentage
for both time of years compared with the other countries. The
portion
of women from
France
in 1980 placed
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second
while
women from the USA gained equal counts of
portion
as
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in 2015. The data illustrates the female students from
Australia
who were going into higher education in 1980 commanded the highest
portion
among others at roughly 59%, followed by
France
at 50% and others with less than 40%. It appears that South Korea had the least share at approximately 15%. In 2015,
Australia
's
percentage
experienced a steady trend with 59%,
while
other shares came up with a significant increment.
Furthermore
, The USA’s
percentage
equals
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Australia
's count, followed by The UK and
France
at roughly 55%.
Although
the
portion
was increased, The Korean
percentage
remains the lowest at 30%.
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