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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the portions of female school-leavers going to higher education in 5 distinct countries including the UK, the USA,
Australia
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, South Korea, and
France
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 between the period of 1980 and 2015.
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, it can be seen that Australian
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 dominated the
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 for both time of years compared with the other countries. The
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 of women from
France
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 in 1980 placed
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second
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 women from the USA gained equal counts of
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 as
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 in 2015. The data illustrates the female students from
Australia
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 who were going into higher education in 1980 commanded the highest
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 among others at roughly 59%, followed by
France
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 at 50% and others with less than 40%. It appears that South Korea had the least share at approximately 15%. In 2015,
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's
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 experienced a steady trend with 59%,
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 other shares came up with a significant increment.
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, The USA’s
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Australia
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's count, followed by The UK and
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 at roughly 55%.
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 the
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 was increased, The Korean
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 remains the lowest at 30%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, france, percentage, portion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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