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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040
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The line chart illustrates the percentage of the population in some Southeast Asia countries,
such
 as
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
,
Thailand
, and Indonesia between 1970 and 2020, with projections for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, it can be seen that the proportion of citizens in all countries has increased and
Malaysia
 has the highest number of people,
while
 the least is
Thailand
.
At
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In
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 the final year projection,
Malaysia
 and Indonesia respectively show that their portion would jump rapidly.
Malaysia
 grew dramatically from 30%
1970
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in 1970
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 to approximately 70% in 2010.
Moreover
, it would rise to nearly 90% in 2040. Indonesia was in the
last
 position at around 15% at
first,
in 1970. Surprisingly, it went up sharply to about 50% in the next 50 years and it would always grow up to above 60% in 2040.
On the other hand
,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and
Thailand
 demonstrate a slow
grow
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growth
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.
Philippines
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The Philippines
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hitted
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hit
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 the same percentage as
Malaysia
 in 1970 and it climbed up until 1990. Suddenly, the trend dropped quickly in 2010, but it would go up again until 2040 with a projection of approximately 50%.
Thailand
 from nearly 20% would increase to close to 50% over the period.
In addition
, the trend rose steadily between 1990 to 2020.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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