The chart and table below give information about visitors at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea

The chart and table below give information about visitors at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given chart represents
percentage
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the percentage
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of tourists from different continents, who came to
Australia
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and the table below shows how long
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they stay, where
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they stay and what activities they do most. As we can see, American and European people visit
Australia
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more than other regions. Only about 10 percent of visitors are from Asia and less than one-fifth of them are from other places.
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the table
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shows us that American and European visitors stay in
Australia
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, for about 2 weeks.
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Asians are more likely to be there two times less than Western people and other regions prefer to stay for approximately one and a half
week
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.
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, we can see that Asians would love to be tenants in luxurious 5-star hotels but Americans are more frugal and choose 4-star comfortable hotels. Europeans and people from other regions are into camping or caravan.
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based on main activities, Asians and Americans show the same result. Both nations love sightseeing. Meanwhile, Europeans pick simple swimming and sunbathing as their favourite activity and tourists from other continents prefer surfing
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Australia
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attracts visitors from all over the world. And
Australia
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is a very big country to explore, so you can find your own favourite activity
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