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The chart and table below give information about visitors at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea

The chart and table below give information about visitors at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea
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The given chart represents
percentage
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the percentage
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 of tourists from different continents, who came to
Australia
 and the table below shows how long
do
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they stay, where
do
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they stay and what activities they do most. As we can see, American and European people visit
Australia
 more than other regions. Only about 10 percent of visitors are from Asia and less than one-fifth of them are from other places.
Firstly
,
table
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the table
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 shows us that American and European visitors stay in
Australia
most
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the most
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, for about 2 weeks.
While
 Asians are more likely to be there two times less than Western people and other regions prefer to stay for approximately one and a half
week
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weeks
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.
Also
, we can see that Asians would love to be tenants in luxurious 5-star hotels but Americans are more frugal and choose 4-star comfortable hotels. Europeans and people from other regions are into camping or caravan.
However
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 based on main activities, Asians and Americans show the same result. Both nations love sightseeing. Meanwhile, Europeans pick simple swimming and sunbathing as their favourite activity and tourists from other continents prefer surfing
Overall
,
Australia
 attracts visitors from all over the world. And
Australia
 is a very big country to explore, so you can find your own favourite activity
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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