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The chart and table below give data about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea

The chart and table below give data about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea
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The provided chart illustrates the percentage of
tourist
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tourists
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 from diverse countries.
Overall
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 it’s understandable that many more tourists come from different parts of the world and
stay
Verb problem
spend
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 more lingering
mount
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most
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 of the time in comparison with other options,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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citizen
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citizens
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 who came from Asia show the lowest percentage,
also
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 the table
depicts
Verb problem
shows
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 that Asian people
has
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have
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 least arrival days compared to other countries.
Firstly
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 the USA and European countries
shows
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show
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 the highest rate of
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the visitor
a visitor
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visitor
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visitors
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 with
percentage
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the percentage
a percentage
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 of one third and
and
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apply
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also
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 stays
about
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for about
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 two weeks which is considerably longer than in other variants
Linking Words
Secondly
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Secondly,
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 Asia and other regions have the lowest
mount
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amount
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 of
tourist
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tourists
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 which is under one fifth and their holidays
last
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 about
week
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a week
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 which is much less than in other options

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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