The graph below provides information on the nuber of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.

The graph below provides information on the nuber of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.
the line graph illustrates the number of students who went abroad to study from three
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countries
which are ( the
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,
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and AUSTRALIA ) during
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years
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period
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that
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has the highest
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of students ,
while
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the lowest .
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,
United
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Kingdom was the second between them. At the beginning of
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,
AMRECAN
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AMERICAN
started with 50000
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abroad
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thereafter
, it decreased slightly over the next four years . but , returned to the same level in 2007 . British learns
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witnessed
a very different trend . the number of
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public
pupils
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with 30000
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in 2002 .
after
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reached
a low of just over 20000 . AUSTRALIA remained relatively stable ,
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10000 in 2002 . the
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public
dropped
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to under 10000 in the next two years .
then
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reunited
recounted
to the same level to the end of
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  • trend
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