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The graph below provides information on the nuber of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.

The graph below provides information on the nuber of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.
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the line graph illustrates the number of students who went abroad to study from three
conutries
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countries
 which are ( the
Uk
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,
US
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the US
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 and AUSTRALIA ) during
five
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years
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five-year
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period
 .
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noticeable
 that
USA
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the USA
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 has the highest
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 of students ,
while
 AUSTRALIA
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 the lowest .
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,
United
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 Kingdom was the second between them. At the beginning of
period
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 ,
AMRECAN
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AMERICAN
 started with 50000
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abored
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abroad
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thereafter
 , it decreased slightly over the next four years . but , returned to the same level in 2007 . British learns
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witnessed
 a very different trend . the number of
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public
pupils
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 with 30000
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 in 2002 .
after
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period
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reached
 a low of just over 20000 . AUSTRALIA remained relatively stable ,
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t
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at
 10000 in 2002 . the
puplic
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public
 dropped
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 to under 10000 in the next two years .
then
 ,
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reunited
recounted
 to the same level to the end of
period
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 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • notable
  • peaks
  • drops
  • pattern
  • outlier
  • data
  • potential reasons
  • increase
  • decrease
  • speculate
  • long-term trends
  • provided information
  • analyze
  • overall
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