Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in oder to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.

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wanted to run a business, it would probably be some kind of IT startup. I'll try to start it in 2025-2026
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because
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need some time to prepare.
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can't do it in 2024 because of
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some IT background
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Try to elaborate more on why learning a foreign language for travel or work is important. Provide specific examples or situations where it proves useful.
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When discussing alternative reasons, make sure to offer clear, well-rounded arguments and examples. Discuss cultural understanding, cognitive benefits, or even personal satisfaction. This will make your response more comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating a more structured flow in your essay. Begin with a clear introduction stating both viewpoints, followed by a thorough discussion, and end with a strong conclusion summarizing your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Include connecting phrases and transition words to help guide your reader through your arguments. Words like 'furthermore,' 'however,' and 'consequently' can be very useful.
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Your idea for starting an IT business shows forward planning and aligns with your background. This kind of relevant personal experience can enrich your essay.
coherence cohesion
You are concise and direct, which helps in maintaining reader's interest.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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