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In some countries, students pay their college or university fees, while in some others, the government pays for them. Do the advantages of governments paying for fees outweigh the disadvantages?

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Education
 plays
pivotal
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a pivotal
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 to improve
overall
 aspects
likewise
, social,
economical
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 and educational of the nation.
Thus
 in many countries, their authorities have
take
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taken
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 financial responsibility for
higher
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the higher
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education
 of the
students
.
While
 in other nations, individuals have to pay their
fees
 for
further
 studies. In
this
 essay pros of paying
fees
 by
government
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the government
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 outweigh the cons.
To begin
with
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with,
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 the most significant advantage is
students
 can pursue their
education
 without any financial barriers.
For instance
 ,
person
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the person
a person
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 who belongs to
the
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a
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 poor family which cannot afford
fees
 for higher
study
. So
by
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with
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 the help of
States
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state
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authorities
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authority
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authority,
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 every
students
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student
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 can achieve their
education
 and
get
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take
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 a step towards their dreams.
Moreover
, it creates equality amongst
community
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the community
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, in which everyone
have
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has
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same
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the same
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 rites for
education
.
However
, nowadays educational institutes have become commercial trade. They are taking as much
as
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apply
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higher
fees
 from the
students
as a result
,
students
 cannot survive with their financial abilities and it leads towards
mental
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a mental
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 burden.
On the contrary
, people have become more vulnerable and less responsible for
education
 because they
gets
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get
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 it free of cost.
Therefore
,
individual
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an individual
the individual
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 cannot
take
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make
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 appropriate efforts for their
study
 as
literacy
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the literacy
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 rate will be decreased
of
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in
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this
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these
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 countries.
In addition
 to that
students
 can not learn efficiently and effectively.
Hence
 their
study
as well as
 knowledge
affect
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were affected
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 by multiple reasons and their academic score
fallen
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fell
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 dramatically.
To conclude
although
students
 can achieve their dream
study
 and courses with the help of
government
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the government
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 they become less responsible regarding their studies. So it affects their career and success.
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