The maps below show an industrial area in the town of norbiton, and planned future development of the site

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the industrial

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arena in the town of Norbiton.

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, it can be seen there would be several changes that make the next industrial area become a new place

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more suitable for living,

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the position of

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field remains. Today, the industrial zone is located in the east of Norbiton town and consists of a centre industry complex, a river, and a farmland field. The industry is placed in the middle of

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area, the river in the north of the firm, and the farmland in the above of the river.

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that,

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location is dominated by a huge flat land

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nothing there. In the future, the industrial range will be relocated by many buildings and the main aim is to support the humans living there. The shop spot would be replaced by some houses, a playground, a school, a medical centre, and shops.

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, the farmland would be renovated by housing

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connected to the road, a new shape of the simple road before.

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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of norbiton, and planned future development of the site

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