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Sources of electricity in four countries 2003-2008

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The pie charts compare the expenditures of electricity in four different
countries
 in terms of 3 categories between 2003 and 2008.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 Indian and Vietnamese people spent the largest proportion of their budget on just fossil fuels.
However
, Moroccans and Swedes spent more
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hydrapower
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hydropower
. It is
also
 worth noting that the
countries
 like
India
 and
Sweden
 had the source
as
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 nuclear power
comparing
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 to other
countries
. In the category of fossils, the highest percentage of
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fossils
were
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 in
India
 about 81.9%.
While
 in
Sweden
 diminished
at
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 4% and it was the lowest percentage of using fossil fuel.
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,
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Morocco was slightly higher than
Sweden
 about 4.5%, in Vietnam was marginally lower than
India
 at 56.3%. In terms of
hydrapower
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hydropower
, Moroccans exceeded the highest percentage of
this
 source, which represented 95.5%, but in
India
 minimized
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 14.6%.
In
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Sweden
 and Vietnam were relatively similar, at 52% and 43.7%, respectively. In the source of nuclear power, Swedes stood at 44%,
while
 in
India
 was just 3.5%. Specifically, other
countries
 did not use
the
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nuclear power.
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