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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information about world spending and population. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information about world spending and population. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A comparative visualization of the proportion of
world's
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the world's
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population
 in continents of Europe,
Americas
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the Americas
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, Africa, Asia, and others is presented
along with
 a
break-down
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breakdown
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 of the
world
's expenditure on food, clothing, shelter, and transportation.
Overall
, the global dominance of Asia's
population
 can be vividly seen.
Additionally
,
rgearding
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regarding
 the spending, it is notable that the expenditure on things other than food, clothes, transportation, or
accomedation
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accommodation
accommodations
; holds a bigger proportion of
the worlds spending
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the world's spending
the spending of the world
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 compared to any of the mentioned categories. A closer look
to
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at
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 the data regarding the
world
's
population
 shows
a
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apply
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that more than half of the people (57%) are
locaded
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located
 in Asia.
Euroupe
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Europe
 and
Americas
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the Americas
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 ,
however
, account for
and
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an
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 equal proportion of 14% each, granting them a 4% lead over Africa.
Moreover
, The remaining 5% of the total
population
 of Earth
are
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is
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 located in other places. Turning to the statistics regarding
world-wide
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worldwide
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 expenditure, it is notable that essential human needs
such
 as nutrition (24%) , clothing (6%), housing(12%), and transportation (18%) , in total, hold 60% of the
world
's spending and the remaining 40% is dedicated to other unspecified categories.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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