The pie charts show the amount of money that a Kazakh charity organization spent and received in 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the amount of money that a Kazakh charity

organization spent and received in 2019.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main

features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
given
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pie chart illustrates the amount of money that a Kazakh charity organization spent and received in 2019,
It is clear that
Invested Income and Government Grants
is
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are
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the lowest
source
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sources
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of
revenue
for the charity.
According to
the pie chart, the community contributes 10.4%
on
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of
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the income of the organization,
However
,
Kazakh
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Kazakhs
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rely heavily on Donated food earnings,
Nonetheless
, 0.4% of the profits for the commission is anonymous,
there
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and there
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is no clear information about where
this
profit came from.
Secondly
, approximately 95% of the expenditure of the commission was spent on Program services which is a big percentage,
whereas
1,6% is
spender
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spent
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on management and 2.6% on Fundraising. In conclusion, the organization didn't spend all the
revenue
, they took about 1.5% of the
revenue
for them,in my
opinion
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I consider it fair because at least they should earn some money in order to encourage them to increase their
revenue
in the next budget.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words revenue with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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