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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

#plans #show #harbour
The given maps illustrate the changes
of
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Harbour
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the Harbour
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 from 2000 to the present.
Overall
, a comparison of the two maps reveals a little transformation of Porth
harbour
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Harbour
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. The most noticeable is that
instead
 of the southeast part of the Porth harbour,the castle was replaced by the hotel with the access road. In the year 2000, at the start of the main road, there were Marina private yachts, which were replaced
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 fishing boats.
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, in the past
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there was only one dock in the northeast part of the Porth harbours.
Then
,
new
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 dock was built, so there are two docks today.
By contrast
, in the southwest, there were no facilities. Now, there are showers and toilets.
Additionally
, cafes and shops were constructed in the place of empty land which is near the lifeboat. In the southern part, the public beach was
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 to a private beach
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 the hotel users.
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task achievement
Consider providing more specific details and comparisons to enhance the depth of your response, as this will improve your task achievement score.
coherence cohesion
Work on enhancing the logical flow of your essay by using more varied cohesive devices and ensuring that each point logically connects to the next.
coherence cohesion
Including a brief conclusion can help summarize your points and provide a clearer structure to your essay.
task achievement
The essay addresses the key changes in the harbour, showing an overall understanding of the task.
task achievement
Most of the main points are well-supported with specific examples from the maps.
coherence cohesion
Paragraphs are used to separate different ideas, improving readability.

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  • maritime safety
  • leisure destination
  • tourism-focused
  • infrastructure improvements
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  • landmark
  • expanded roads
  • transport infrastructure
  • industrial use
  • cruise ship terminal
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