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the chart below shows the total number of minutes of telephone calls in the uk, devided into three categories , from 1995-2002 summaries the informations

the chart below shows the total number of minutes of telephone calls in the uk, devided into three categories , from 1995-2002 summaries the informations
The bar chart illustrates the total number of
minutes
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 (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, categorized into local fixed line, national and international fixed line, and mobile calls, over the period from 1995 to 2002.
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, local
fixed-line
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 calls were the most popular throughout the period,
although
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 their
usage
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 fluctuated. National and international
fixed-line
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 calls and mobile calls showed a steady increase in
usage
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 over these years. In 1995, local
fixed-line
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 calls were the highest, starting at around 72
billion
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minutes
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.
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 number increased gradually to a peak of approximately 90
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minutes
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 in 1999.
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, after 1999, there was a decline, dropping to around 70
billion
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minutes
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 by 2002. National and international
fixed-line
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 calls
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 saw a consistent rise from about 37
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995 to roughly 60
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minutes
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 in 2002.
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 category showed steady growth each year without any noticeable decrease. Mobile calls, which started at the lowest point in 1995 with only about 4
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minutes
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, experienced the most significant growth. By 2002, the
usage
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 had surged to approximately 45
billion
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minutes
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, indicating a dramatic increase in mobile phone
usage
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 during
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 period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, fixed-line, usage, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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