The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The three pie charts
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the average
consumption
of
sodium
, saturated fat, and added
sugar
by meal.
Overall
,
while
the intake of
sodium
and saturated fat is higher at
dinner
than
any
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other
meals
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, added
sugar
is eaten most in snacks.
Sodium
consumption
is highest at
dinner
and second highest at lunch, making up
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43% and 29% of total
sodium
consumption
respectively. The proportions of
this
type of nutrient taken
in
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snack time and breakfast are the same, both at 14%.
Dinner
and lunch
also
account for the largest and the second largest proportion of total saturated fat intake respectively, at 37% and 26%.
However
, a greater proportion is eaten at snack time, at 21%, rather than breakfast
16
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%. Compared with the other two nutrients, added
sugar
has a relatively low percentage of
consumption
at
dinner
, at 23%. It is snacks the main source of added
sugar
intake, at 42%.
However
, like the other nutrients, it is
also
consumed least at breakfast, at only 16%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, sodium, sugar, dinner with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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