The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The three pie charts
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the average
consumption
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of
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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by meal.
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,
while
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the intake of
sodium
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and saturated fat is higher at
dinner
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than
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other
meals
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, added
sugar
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is eaten most in snacks.
Sodium
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consumption
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is highest at
dinner
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and second highest at lunch, making up
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43% and 29% of total
sodium
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consumption
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respectively. The proportions of
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type of nutrient taken
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snack time and breakfast are the same, both at 14%.
Dinner
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and lunch
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account for the largest and the second largest proportion of total saturated fat intake respectively, at 37% and 26%.
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, a greater proportion is eaten at snack time, at 21%, rather than breakfast
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%. Compared with the other two nutrients, added
sugar
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has a relatively low percentage of
consumption
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at
dinner
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, at 23%. It is snacks the main source of added
sugar
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intake, at 42%.
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, like the other nutrients, it is
also
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consumed least at breakfast, at only 16%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, sodium, sugar, dinner with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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