The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.

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the proportion

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of people who

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in towns in 4 different Asian cities over the period 50 years from 1970 to 2020 with projection through 2040.

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every city has

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Malaysia and Indonesia experienced an increase,

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, there was a decline in

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Thailand. The percentage of the population living in Malaysia and

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(29% and 30% respectively) in 1970, followed by

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fluctuations in both figures until 1990.

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next 30 years the proportion

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urban citizens saw a rise to 75% and

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expected to have increased to nearly 85% by 2040. In terms of Thailand and Indonesia percentage of urban population in 1970 began at 18% and 15% respectively. The figure

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Indonesia increased slowly from 15% in 1970 to 50% in 2020 prediction shows

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to 60% in 2040,

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it is projected that the proportion of people living in Thailand will be 45% in 2040.