Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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Work on structuring your response. Start with a clear introduction that outlines the main points you'll discuss, and conclude with a summary of those points to reinforce your argument.
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Elaborate on your main points with specific examples and explanations to provide a more comprehensive response. This will help strengthen your argument and make your essay more persuasive.
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Focus on improving grammatical accuracy and vocabulary. Make sure to use a variety of sentence structures to make the essay more engaging and ensure better readability.
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You have successfully identified some valid points on how music can bridge cultural and age differences.
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Your essay reflects a genuine effort to address the topic and share your perspective, which shows good engagement with the task.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
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In the world of professional sports, a debate rages on the behavior expected from players, both on and off the field. While some argue that it should be allowed to misbehave as long as they are playing good, others say players holds a responsibility to maintain behaviour towards others all the time. This essay will look at the both scenarios before reaching to the conclusion.
Many people argue that spending money on family celebration is very essential and significant thing. while others claim that it is not worth it and just bruning your cash. in my view, it is realy imortant to spend money and time with family.
Issues related to education development are frequently discussed these days. Although some believes that the authority to design course syllabus should belong to students, while others criticize this and argue that universities should play crucial roles in providing the practical subjects, such as those related to present day society. In the following paragraphs, both sides of this statement will be discussed and will bring further examples and explanations to support my viewpoint.
It is widely believed that youngsters in a number of nations are without jobs and do not have any skills, however, the army is actively recruiting new members. Hence, service in the armed forces is helpful, and I partially agree with the statement that military service should be compulsory, as it is helpful, yet can be traumatic.