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The maps below show the changes that occurred to a town called Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that occurred to a town called Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram depicts the transformations applied to a
town
 called Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
current
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 layout effectively
utilize
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 the spaces, catering for
large
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a large
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number
 of residents. In 1780, the
town
 contained only 100 homes, including four farms situated in the middle near the
river
.
On
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 the far right area, there were only two
villages
, the
town
 was surrounded
with
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by
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 numerous trees. In 1860, the
town
had
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made
number
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a number
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 of modifications. These modifications involved, adding
bridge
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a bridge
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 and
main
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 road that connect the residents with the next part of the
town
, reducing the
number
 of farms to
the
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half, removing some trees, and increasing the
number
 of
villages
 and homes to 3 and 200, respectively. By 2000, the
number
 of citizens had significantly increased to 500, leading to
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more facilities and services. These include
,
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 removing the farms, constructing two schools and sports fields,
building
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and building
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 2 roads one of them is connected to the
river
 and directed to the
villages
,
while
 the other one
connected
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 to the
villages
 and directed to the schools and other facilities.
Moreover
, a
number
 of shops
added
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were added
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 next
the
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to the
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river
 and a wetland for birds
at the end
 of the
river
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, number, river, villages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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