The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. TASK 1

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The maps provide

the

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apply

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information about the changes in the centre of a small town called Islip before and after its proposed redevelopment.

Overall

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, Islip town centre

that

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has

been

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changed significantly after the planned redevelopment including new amenities and facilities compared to now.

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the north countryside

replaced

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was replaced

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by a dual carriageway which

then

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connected with

main

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road on either side of

east

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the east

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and west, but one gate only opened on the east side to

entre

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the city to reach the new housing area. After that, many shops were demolished and remodified by expanding the space for public needs

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as bus station, shopping centre,

car

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and car

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parks next to

housing

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the housing

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along

north-west

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the north-west

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side.

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, the main road that has changed as

pedastrians

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pedestrians

pedestrian

walk space.

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the south sector close to

general

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the general

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pupil

way

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multiple shops and parks

remains

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same

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the same

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after improvement. Beneath that housing moved into

south-west

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a south-west

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corner by developing new housing between them.

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close to the connecting road on the extreme south level even after elaboration school consistently same but

housing

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the housing

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slightly shifted to

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the south-west

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south-west

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southwest

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space.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.

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5
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

181 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Small town
Centre
Development
Maps
Plans
Introduce
Topic
Purpose
Essay
Description
Current
Key features
Facilities
Advantages
Positive aspects
Benefits
Proposed
Changes
Improvements
Suggested
Potential
Course of action
Summarize
Opinion

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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. TASK 1

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