The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. TASK 1
The maps provide
the
information about the changes in the centre of a small town called Islip before and after its proposed redevelopment.
Correct article usage
apply
Overall
, Islip town centre that
has Correct pronoun usage
apply
been
changed significantly after the planned redevelopment including new amenities and facilities compared to now.
Unnecessary verb
apply
Begin from
the north countryside Verb problem
From
replaced
by a dual carriageway which Add a missing verb
was replaced
then
connected with main
road on either side of Change the article
the main
east
and west, but one gate only opened on the east side to Correct article usage
the east
entre
the city to reach the new housing area. After that, many shops were demolished and remodified by expanding the space for public needs Correct your spelling
enter
such
as bus station, shopping centre, car
parks next to Correct word choice
and car
housing
along Add an article
the housing
north-west
side. Correct article usage
the north-west
Then
, the main road that has changed as pedastrians
walk space. Correct your spelling
pedestrians
pedestrian
However
, on
the south sector close to Change preposition
in
general
pupil Correct article usage
the general
way
multiple shops and parks Add a comma
way,
remains
Change the verb form
remain
same
after improvement. Beneath that housing moved into Correct article usage
the same
south-west
corner by developing new housing between them. Add an article
a south-west
the south-west
finally
close to the connecting road on the extreme south level even after elaboration school consistently same but housing
slightly shifted to Correct article usage
the housing
Correct article usage
the south-west
south-west
space.Correct your spelling
southwest
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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