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Euthanasia, or mercy killing, has been in the news more and more recently. Many people are strongly against such a practice, but there is a growing demand to have it legalized. How far do you agree with euthanasia being legal? Write an essay on it

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It has been observed that the concept of
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 or mercy killing is becoming very common.
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 a large sector of society is against the above phenomenon,
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, some of them are in
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 of it. I hold a balanced opinion in
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 respect. My inclination is elaborated in the ensuing paragraph with relevant examples.
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 is sometimes considered as a pain relief for people. When a person is suffering from chronic disease giving him an adamant time and there is no remedy available for that disease. In that scenario, the person himself and the family members opine for
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. They believe that
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 would end their suffering and provide them permanent relief. A pertinent instance of
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 would be the mercy killing of my friend’s uncle who had been lying in a coma for the
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 decade and there was no improvement in his health. His family was already in debt because of high bills generated by the hospital administration
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 they had to go for
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. Their decision was correct, and in the above-mentioned case,
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 acted as a boon.
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, we cannot neglect the drawbacks of mercy killing. Every person has a lifespan that no one should alter. Birth and death are natural processes that are controlled by nature we must not interfere with those processes. Some people can misuse
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 practice if it gets legal authority. A substantial example of
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 would be planned and intentional murders of the family members to acquire the property. Suffice it to say that it is extremely hard to manage
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 as it could lead to a rise in the crime rate. To recapitulate, I reiterate that despite having numerous benefits for society, especially for those who are having a hard time,
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 still has a bulk of demerits that cannot be neglected.
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task achievement
To improve the essay, provide a more comprehensive discussion of both the pros and cons of euthanasia. Currently, the essay presents both sides, but it lacks depth in its analysis. Consider adding more specific examples and statistical data to strengthen the arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay can benefit from smoother transitions between ideas. This will help in maintaining a more logical flow of arguments. Consider using transitional phrases like 'Furthermore,' 'Moreover,' and 'In contrast.'
coherence cohesion
Avoid overly repetitive phrases and structures. The conclusion, for instance, could be rephrased for variety and impact. Instead of just recapitulating, try to synthesize the information presented.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame the discussion well.
task achievement
The use of personal anecdotes and specific examples, such as the story of your friend's uncle, adds a meaningful touch to the discussion and makes the argument more relatable.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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