The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
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The pie
chart
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compares the location of
dance
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classes
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in terms of 4 categories,
however
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, the bar
chart
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compares types of
dance
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classes
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by age group.
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, the most used category was private studious, and the opposite was true for college-based studious. The most popular
dance
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class was ballet under 11
years
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and the most popular figure was modern
dance
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between 11 and 16
years
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students
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. As the pie
chart
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shows the most used location was private studious,
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the least studio was college-based. The location of
dance
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classes
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in community halls and others was less than in school halls, 24% and 18%, respectively. As the
chart
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shows,
students
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under 11 were more interested in ballet than
students
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from 11 to 16
years
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old, 600 and 300, respectively. The next
dance
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class was tap.
Students
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from 11 to 16
years
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old were less than under 11 in Tap
dance
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classes
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, 450 and 420. The remaining
dance
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class was modern.
Students
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from 11 to 16 were more than under 11
years
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old.
Students
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from 11 to 16 were approximately 520,
whereas
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students
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under 11 were 300
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, dance, classes, years, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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