The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
The pie chart gives data on where
dance
classes
was
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attended and the bar chart illustrates what types of
dance
classes
were taken
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place by two categories of age
group
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in
particular
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a particular
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city
of
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Australia.
Overall
, the most of
dance
classes
were in private studios. In terms of types of
classes
, ballet was the most popular in
age
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the age
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group under 11,
whereas
modern
dance
classes
were mostly taken by children who were 11-16 years old. The highest proportion of dancers was shown in private studious
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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