Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Many folks state that
professional
like doctors and engineers, have to work in the state where they did their learning. Fix the agreement mistake
professionals
On the other hand
, the
rest Correct article usage
apply
assure
that they should Change the form of the verb
assured
be work
in another country depending on their Change the verb form
be working
favor
. I tend to the second statement because professional workers need a certification for their career path and suitable wages, here are my outlines about it.
Change the spelling
favour
Firstly
, professional worker
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workers
such
as doctors and engineers must be trained by a formal institution which provides a credible credential in this
case sometimes to get that certification they need to move to particular
country that Add an article
a particular
suitable
with their major. The purpose is to get Add a missing verb
is suitable
deeply
exposure Change the word
deep
about
what they study Change preposition
to
for
before Change preposition
apply
encounter
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encountering
with
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apply
the
real-case problems on their job. As an example, I will take Correct article usage
apply
doctor
profession. After Correct article usage
the doctor
graduate
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graduating
from
their Change preposition
with
bachelor
they must continue their internship before Add a comma
bachelor,
get
Change the verb form
getting
Correct article usage
a doctor
doctor
license. In some Change noun form
doctor's
case
, the junior doctor will be placed at Fix the agreement mistake
cases
certain
hospital Add an article
the certain
a certain
where
matches with each specialization.
Correct word choice
that
However
, every individual should have the opportunity to reach their maximum potential. Those employed in the professions are some of the world’s most highly skilled workers. Therefore
, they are in huge demand. There is a global market for their skills, and they can command much higher salaries by moving abroad. If they were blocked from doing so, it would be a substantial financial disadvantage for the individual. For instance
, petroleum engineers can make hundreds of thousands of dollars more in oil-rich countries, such
as Saudi Arabia, compared to remaining in Europe. I agree that the individual’s right to work wherever they please trumps any nationalistic considerations.
In conclusion, although
there is a tremendous amount of investment in a professional’s development. They should have the right to choose whether to repay that by working in their home state or moving to a region them the highest value for their skills.Submitted by damayanti.nsd on
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task achievement
Ensure you thoroughly address both views of the topic by providing balanced arguments before stating your opinion. You have focused more on the argument in favor of freedom to work elsewhere; try to give more weight to the opposing view as well.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, but the body paragraphs need improvement in logical structure. Make sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea and that idea is well-explained. Consider using topic sentences and transition words to create clearer connections between ideas.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction clearly introduces the topic and sets up your opinion clearly.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion summarizes your main points succinctly and reinforces your stance effectively.