Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
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insurances
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has not
proven
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task achievement
Ensure correct use of English expressions and idioms. Phrases like 'sum of folks' need correction to a more natural 'number of people'.
coherence cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph. For example, rephrase the first point to: 'Firstly, alternative medicines and treatments can pose serious safety risks.'
coherence cohesion
Improve grammar accuracy. Some sentences are hard to follow due to grammatical mistakes and incorrect word usage. For example, 'Since the formulation not suits with patience problems' should be 'Since the formulation does not suit the patient’s problems'.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
You have identified key reasons why you believe this is a negative development, such as safety concerns and issues with health insurance claims.