INCREASING THE PRICE OF PETROL IS THE BEST WAY TO SOLVE THE GROWING TRAFFIC AND POLLUTION PROBLEM To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Due to
the revolution of
automobile
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industry
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industry,
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most
of
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the
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people are using private
vehicles
,
hence
the
traffic
crisis and environmental impacts are soaring daily, especially in urban areas. There is a good solution to eradicate
this
by escalating the
cost
of
fuel
. I strongly disagree with
this
statement by giving the
below mentioned
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points.
Initially
, most of the individuals have
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an
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own
vehicle
at
present
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ambience.
Moreover
, government banks and
others
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other
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private
vehicle
dealers are offering
lot
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of
vehicle
loan
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loans
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to
enthrall
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customers to buy a
vehicle
.
Thus
, consumers who are deploying private
vehicles
have increased abundantly.
Therefore
,
traffic
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the traffic
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crisis has increased drastically.
In addition
, to eliminate
this
issue, if the
fuel
cost
has increased it will directly affect the public, because the
fuel
cost
is the deciding factor of the country’s economy and there might be a chance for increasing the
cost
of
other important thing
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another important thing
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which are required for people. To illustrate, in my country the oil price
is varying
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frequently,
due
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and due
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to
this
the other products
such
as groceries, vegetables and medicines prices are increasing and
this
will create more financial burden
to
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public
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the public
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.
Furthermore
, there
is
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are
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a lot of ways to avoid
the
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traffic
and environmental pollution. Better government put a special tax
for
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on
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private
vehicles
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vehicle
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owners and encourage the public to use public transport.
In addition
,
pollution
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the pollution
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control board and transport department will conduct a regular inspection
on
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of
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vehicles
and put
a
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severe penalty, which has not
maintained
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maintaining
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properly.
To conclude
,
traffic
crisis and environmental pollution must be reduced
then
only the country will become a good shape.
For that
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fuel
increasing
fuel
price
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prices
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is not fair and it will affect the people who are
in
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apply
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below
poverty
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the poverty
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line.
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