The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.
The given flow chart illustrates the process of the production of a biofuel called ethanol.
All in all, it represents that
this
process is consisted
of 2 main levels (pre-processing and processing) and 8 steps.
Change to the active voice
consists
has consisted
According to
the diagram, at the pre-processing level, firstly
, sunlight and carbon dioxide (CO2) are used by plants
and trees which make them grow. Secondly
, these plants
are being harvested by engines, such
as tractors. Next,
these harvested plants
are put into an engine in order to cut down into celluloses
In terms of the processing level, these celluloses are being processed in order to produce sugars. Fix the agreement mistake
cellulose
finally
, microbes are added to sugars and as a result
, ethanol is made.
It is noticeable that ethanol is being consumed by cars, aeroplanes, and trucks and carbon dioxide is created consequently
. This
carbon dioxide is going to be continually absorbed by trees and plants
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