The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided chart illustrates the detailed
process
related to honey production.
Overall
, a glance at the diagram reveals that a man-made process
is being represented. 7 stages of this
process
are shown in this
linear process
. The first stage is connected with the construction of a hive, while
the last
stage is related to the production of honey.
Now, turning to the details, first of all, during the first phase the hive is constructed by bees. Then
, they fly to flowers and collect some nectar
from them. In the fourth stage, bees return to the hive to put the nectar
into the cells and they do some efforts related to how they place the nectar
into the cells with the help of the air. Finally
, when the nectar
is in the cells, the water evaporation process
has occurred. The final step of this
process
is related to the fact that the honey is ready.Submitted by sofina.elena2014 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, nectar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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