The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided chart illustrates the detailed
process
related to honey production.
Use synonyms
Overall
, a glance at the diagram reveals that a man-made Linking Words
process
is being represented. 7 stages of Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
process
are shown in Use synonyms
this
linear Linking Words
process
. The first stage is connected with the construction of a hive, Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
last
stage is related to the production of honey.
Now, turning to the details, first of all, during the first phase the hive is constructed by bees. Linking Words
Then
, they fly to flowers and collect some Linking Words
nectar
from them. In the fourth stage, bees return to the hive to put the Use synonyms
nectar
into the cells and they do some efforts related to how they place the Use synonyms
nectar
into the cells with the help of the air. Use synonyms
Finally
, when the Linking Words
nectar
is in the cells, the water evaporation Use synonyms
process
has occurred. The final step of Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
process
is related to the fact that the honey is ready.Use synonyms
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, nectar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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