Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in oder to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.

Some people say that the cause of them getting taught a new
language
other than their mother
language
is
for studying
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to study
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abroad or for
travel
reasons. And in
this
essay
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essay,
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I'm going to give a
reveiw
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review
about both studying and
traveling
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travelling
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and
also
I'm giving my
opinion
. Learning a new
language
in
order
to work is an
increidable
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incredible
way of learning a new
language
, it will give you so many opportunities if you write it on your resume.
In addition
to that, if the company you are working at have a new client who speaks the new
language
that you learned, it will make you special in the eyes of others and you might
also
get a promotion because of that. Meanwhile, if
your
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you
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learned
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are learning
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a new
language
because you're going to
travel
, I find that very interesting and amusing, I remember one time I went to
Turkiey
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Turkey
, I was the only member of my family who
knows
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knew
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how to speak
turkish
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Turkish
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,
I
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and I
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got so many discounts from
turkish
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Turkish
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people and they treated me so
nicley
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nicely
because I knew their
langauge
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language
, many
foriegn
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foreign
countries might get mad at you if you tried to speak to them in your
language
and not in theirs. So, I find it helpful if you
learned
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learn
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to speak in another
langauge
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language
in
order
to
travel
. In my honest
opinion
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opinion,
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both reasons will get you to learn the
language
you want to.
However
, if a
humanbeing
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human being
wanted to try learning a new
language
only for these two reasons, they might get bored very easily. We can learn a new
language
even for fun, we can learn the basics,
such
as saying hello, good morning, goodbye, or how to
order
in a
resturant
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restaurant
. The easiest way to do that in my
opinion
is to watch movies or series with the
language
you want to learn. It will give you so
many
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much
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vocuabulary
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vocabulary
and it
would
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will
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be fun. In conclusion, learning a new
langauge
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language
in
order
to
travel
or to study is a valid reason in my
opinion
.
Although
, if you want to make
more
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it more
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enjoyable and less boring, you can download a program online and learn from it or watch series and movies.
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
The essay addresses both sides of the topic and gives a personal opinion, fulfilling the task's requirements.

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