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You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: explain why you have moved describe the new house invite your friend to come and visit

#house #friend #visit
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Hi David, How have you been? I have
exiting
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 news. I have moved into a new
house
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 in a new estate. There are three reasons I have decided to move
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.
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, I've decided it is time for a change. As I have lived in my old
property
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 for more than ten years, I've thought that it would be nice to have a change in environment with new neighbours.
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, I moved so that I could be closer to family.
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, it is convenient as there a shops
whithin
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within
 walking distance from my new
property
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. The
house
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 is a two-story building with 3 bedrooms and 2 bathrooms. The
house
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 comes with a garden full of trees and flowers.
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, it made
this
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property
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 pet-friendly. The highlight of the
house
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 is the master bedroom as it has its own bathroom and a walk-in wardrobe. I would love for you to come and visit my
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property
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 sometime next week. Let me know when you're free. Warm regards, Joscelin
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Grammar & Spelling
Make sure to review your writing for small spelling mistakes, such as 'exiting' instead of 'exciting', 'there a shops' instead of 'there are shops', and 'whithin' instead of 'within'. These minor errors, while not major, can affect the readability of your writing.
Coherence & Cohesion
The letter is well-structured, but you can enhance clarity by specifying which part of the paragraph answers each point of the prompt.
Task Achievement
The letter effectively explains the reasons for moving, describes the new house vividly, and ends with a friendly invitation.
Writing Tone
The tone of the letter is conversational and friendly, perfectly suited for writing to a friend.
Coherence & Cohesion
Each main point about the move is addressed clearly within distinct sections, maintaining clarity and coherence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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