In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?
There are many advantages and
disadvantages
to being away from family while
you are studying in many sides we will discuss the reasons and the advantages and disadvantages
Sometimes the university
is far away from home
so they have to move to another home
near to the university
and sometimes they don.don't need to move because the destination is not far in my opinion if I'm in my city but the university
is a little bit far from my home
i
would stay in my Change the capitalization
I
home
because I don't like to be alone in small apartments I like to be surrounded by my family also
the biggest reason why I don't want be far from my family that because I'm not socially person and I can not depend on my self anytime and this
is so bad for me if i
got a big offer from my dream Change the capitalization
I
university
in the UK .
The benefit of living away from home
is to focus on studying only but it is so hard to live alone and it feels so depressing apply
you can make friendships and bring a roommate Verb problem
apply
this
will make you feel better I see the benefits of living away from family is not outweighed the disadvantages
its literally opposite , also
living alone and far from your family will make you learn a lot of things like cooking and cleaning by yourself it makes you depends
on your self
in conclusion, Change the verb form
depend
i
would say that the two Change the capitalization
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idea
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ideas
has
two sides , advantages and Correct subject-verb agreement
have
disadvantages
its
depends on the person and how he is thinking and Change the pronoun
it
however
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You have made a good attempt at discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of living away from family while studying. This shows an understanding of the topic.
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Your conclusion attempts to consider both perspectives, which demonstrates a balanced view on the issue.
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