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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
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 bar chart illustrates how many citizens purchased beverages
such
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 as
drink
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,
coffee
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, and drinking in five areas in Australia in four weeks.
Overall
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,
It is clear that
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 spending on
coffee
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 or
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drink
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drinks
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 in
cafeteria
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the cafeteria
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 is one of the most popular habits in the mentioned five cities,
while
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 the figure for fresh habits showed less popularity in those
place
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places
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. When it comes to visiting
coffee
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shop
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shops
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 for caffeine or tea over the four-week period, 64% of residents had a
coffee
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 or tea in
cafeteria
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the cafeteria
a cafeteria
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 in the same time period.
Similarly
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, the city name of Hobart showed around 63% of habitats visited
coffee
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shop
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shops
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 to
drink
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 caffeine or
drink
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.
Furthermore
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, nearly 44% of people who live in Sydney spend money on fresh
coffee
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, which is one of the most popular habits compared with
other place
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another place
other places
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.
In contrast
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, in Brisbane, 34 per cent of citizens consumed fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 four weeks. In terms of instant
coffee
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, five
place
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places
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 indicated over 45% of people purchased instant
coffee
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.
Moreover
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, those who live in Brisbane and Hobart showed high records in instant
coffee
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, 53% and 54% respectively.
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