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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
 bar chart illustrates how many citizens purchased beverages
such
 as
drink
,
coffee
, and drinking in five areas in Australia in four weeks.
Overall
,
It is clear that
 spending on
coffee
 or
drink
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drinks
show examples
 in
cafeteria
Add an article
the cafeteria
show examples
 is one of the most popular habits in the mentioned five cities,
while
 the figure for fresh habits showed less popularity in those
place
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places
show examples
. When it comes to visiting
coffee
shop
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shops
show examples
 for caffeine or tea over the four-week period, 64% of residents had a
coffee
 or tea in
cafeteria
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the cafeteria
a cafeteria
show examples
 in the same time period.
Similarly
, the city name of Hobart showed around 63% of habitats visited
coffee
shop
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shops
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 to
drink
 caffeine or
drink
.
Furthermore
, nearly 44% of people who live in Sydney spend money on fresh
coffee
, which is one of the most popular habits compared with
other place
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another place
other places
show examples
.
In contrast
, in Brisbane, 34 per cent of citizens consumed fresh
coffee
 in the
last
 four weeks. In terms of instant
coffee
, five
place
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places
show examples
 indicated over 45% of people purchased instant
coffee
.
Moreover
, those who live in Brisbane and Hobart showed high records in instant
coffee
, 53% and 54% respectively.
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