The best way to make roads safer is to make vehicle drivers take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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a subject matter to make roads safer and as one of the options it is proposed to take an exam annually from car drivers. I partially disagree with
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more viable other ways than checking driver's knowledge. On the one hand, there are an array of reasons to take
an
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exams
. First and foremost is safety. It is undeniable that there
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a people who can break
an established rules
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deliberately and
this type
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of people do not give a penny to either law by a state or life civilians. So, if they fail
in
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exam, they should not be allowed to drive
untill
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until
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.
Moreover
, drivers after a long time may forget all marginal rules and to prevent accidents in
such
situations they should pass
exams
in particular
time intervals.
On the other hand
, in my own
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there are more efficient ways to make roads safe. Knowledge,
firstly
, is not enough for
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guaranteeing
the
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safety. It is
presedented
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presented
that most
of
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people know during their crimes that it is illegal but they do it. So, instructing them
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knowledge is not enough. A wise step by
government
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can diminish the
amount
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of accidents.
For instance
, making a rough law that imposes a brutal punishment can startle drivers as they know what will
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them if they break
rules
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.
To conclude
, despite the facts above in favour of taking
exams
,
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reckon that there are more important aspects that need more attention and new reforms
such
as legislation and construction.
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