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In many countries paying things using mobile phone becoming increasingly common.Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages. TASK 2

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In the current scenario, many people are dependent on online payment modes rather than physical ones. Transferring money gradually increased
along with
 the development of phones and apps. I believe that Internet transactions have more advantages than others. The current generation is more reliable on net payments than physical methods.
for instance
, keeping a large amount in your pocket before going shopping makes you feel so scared and reluctant to travel because of Burglary. Imagine having
such
 money in a bank account by carrying your cell phone in your pocket which is really handy. Never make you feel tensed and smoothly one can do shopping.
Moreover
, nowadays all the banks started having their own banking options other than third-party apps which help us to monitor
expenditure
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expenditures
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 and check the amount periodically by showing credited and debited amounts. sometimes the refund or pending status is
also
 observed on it. The greatest disadvantage of using mobile apps is that
required
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 sufficient skills and knowledge and a good network range. If a person is a new user of
this
 kind of trend needs time to adapt and understand the importance of lock and password
on
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apply
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it
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apply
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.
For example
, after purchasing when you scan the barcode to pay an amount, make sure to put
the
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 right secured password to send cash from the bank, when it goes wrong it will get blocked automatically. whilst,
mobile
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the mobile
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 network range
also
need
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 to
watched
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 carefully before payment.
Like
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apply
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In
this
 case,
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 was located
in
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on
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 the groundfloor after doing an hour
shopping
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of shopping
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 as
proceed
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 with
deposit
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the deposit
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due to
 poor network range
cannot
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and did not
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 process the online transit.
Thus
, one cannot complete the shopping successfully. In conclusion, the importance of cell phone app usage increased nowadays without knowing the negativity on it
according to
 the user’s comfort. Apart from one drawback majority of them strongly welcome the more advantages of it.
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