The line graph shows the numbers of queries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The  line graph shows the numbers of queries received  by the  tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in  2011.
The line graph illustrates the data about inquiries, which were received by the tourist information office in one area during a six-month period in 2011.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the top-ranked
way
was in person, meanwhile, the lowest result was shown by
letters
.
In addition
, the telephone had a little increase, in the meantime, emails had a noticeable reduction.
Firstly
, in January, the individual
way
had only 400, in the meantime, emails had approximately 750 questions and
telephones
had 820.
However
, in February, in-person had an increment to 600, meanwhile,
letters
downturned to 650 and
telephones
reduced to 800. In March, the in-person
way
expanded abruptly,
while
emails had a slight drop to 550 and
telephones
had a static result with 1000.
Secondly
, in May,
telephones
and the persons had a dramatic rise to 1400, meanwhile,
letters
decreased significantly to 350.
Nevertheless
, in June, the in-person
way
reached 1900 questions and
telephones
had 1600,
while
letters
had only 390.
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