The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.

The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.
The present maps demonstrate information about the alternative in the Local
Museum
at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in 2 different years( 1957 and 2007). It is obvious, unfortunately, that
this
kind of development had a bad effect on the vegetation area, but the
museum
facilities were increasing.
According to
the pictures,
initially
, in 1957, we can see the
museum
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surrounding
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was
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full of threes, and in
centre
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of the zone we had a small
place
with a special road;
however
, in 2007, most of the trees were destroyed;
as a result
, the garden becomes smaller than past, yet in 2007
museum
place
had evolved, and car park
instead
of the garden which was next to the road. The
museum
building in 2007, was bigger than in1957.
Moreover
, the section of the
place
was not only raised but
also
altered.
In other words
, in 2007 the entrance opened in the
museum
shop at the right of the structure;
then
it added a reception, Cafe, and education
centre
the
place
.
In addition
, the local history room which was in
centre
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replaced by a national history exhibition;
furthermore
, we can see a particular exhibition next to the education
centre
in the north of the building
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attract a broader audience
  • infrastructure
  • interactive displays
  • virtual tours
  • environmental sustainability
  • community engagement
  • strategic partnerships
  • inclusive exhibitions
  • accessibility
  • branding and marketing strategies
  • evolution
  • maintain relevance
  • appeal
  • differently-abled visitors
  • cultural institutions
  • educational organizations
  • joint exhibits
  • exchange programs
  • green spaces
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