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> The maps below show the centre of a small town calles Islip as it is now, and the plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. > Write at least 150 words

> The maps below show the centre of a small town calles Islip as it is now, and the plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. > Write at least 150 words
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Lips
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Lip
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 is a small town, the two maps given illustrate the
center
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centre
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 of
lips
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Lips
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 now and the
center
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centre
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planned
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of planned
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 development.
Overall
, the major difference is that the
center
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centre
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 will contain new housing ,
bus
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a bus
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 station and
shopping
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a shopping
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center
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centre
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. In
details
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detail
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,
in
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on
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 the north
side
 of the
center
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centre
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it
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apply
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is going to be
bus
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a bus
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 station, shopping
center
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centre
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, car parking and new housing
in
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on
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 the
north east
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northeast
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side
however
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, however
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, the
center
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centre
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 now does not
has
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have
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 any of that. The middle of the
center
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centre
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 will contain some shops .
Furthermore
, there
is
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are
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 numerous old houses
in
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on
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 the
south west
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southwest
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side
 and new houses
in
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on
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 the south
side
 behind the park. The school is the only
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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place that will not
gange
Verb problem
change
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 before and after development.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • maps
  • centre of a small town
  • development
  • current
  • planned
  • features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • summary
  • information
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