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The two tables below show statistics of workers of foreign and US birth in the United States last year. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two tables below show statistics of workers of foreign and US birth in the United States last year. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables given give information about statistics of foreign and US people workers in the United States
last
 year.
Overall
, the US birth workforce is extremely higher than the foreign workforce.
Age
 between 45 to 54 is the highest
age
 of foreign get employed
however
, it is between 35 to 44 for US birth.
Firstly
, by gender men are more employed than women for both foreign and United States birth.
Nevertheless
, the number of female and male foreigns that
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
don't get
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
show examples
 is 2,388 and the
US
Correct quantifier usage
number of US
show examples
 people is 12,438.
Secondly
, by
age
Add a comma
age,
show examples
 foreign and US humans are less employed at
age
 65 and plus.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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