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The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.
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The chart below shows the number of
magazines
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 sold per person in five countries in 2003,2005 and projected
sales
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,
It is clear that
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country
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 E is the lowest area in sold
magazines
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 significantly from the bar chart. First of all, the
sales
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 of
magazines
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 in
Country
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is
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are
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 increasing dramatically as shown in the graph,
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Whereas
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country
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 A had a drop
of
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magazines
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 sold gradually in the projected
sales
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 for 2007,
Nonetheless
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, the
sales
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 in
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country
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 decreasing at a low rate.
Furthermore
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, the number of newspapers sold in
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 B is the highest in all three years compared to other areas,
In addition
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,
country
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 A is the second highest
country
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 with sold
magazines
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 right after
country
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 B in 2003,2005 and 2007. In conclusion,
sales
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 of
magazines
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 in
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country
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 A and B are generally similar, but
country
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 E is significantly the lowest compared to all countries in the chart.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words magazines, sales, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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