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the bar chart show the literacy rate

the bar chart show the literacy rate
The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of literacy in seven
regions
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 over the year
of
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2011.
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, it can be seen that there
was
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 more males who
can
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 read and write than females in total.
In addition
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, Central
Asia
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 and Central or Eastern Europe were a venue which showed an equal
in
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literacy’s
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literacy
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rate
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 between boys and girls. taking a look at the
regions
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 where there was a slight disparity between each
genders
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gender
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, namely East
Asia
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 or Pacific, Latin America or
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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,
Arab
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states
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, South and West
Asia
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, and Sub-Saharan Africa. In terms of
Arab
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states
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 and Sub-Saharan Africa, both had approximately 88% and 71% of male residents who have an ability in reading and writing, respectively, when it comes to females’
rate
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 in those
regions
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, it was roughly 10% less. Moving on to East
Asia
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 or
Pacific
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the Pacific
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, there was a similar percentage in both genders, nearly 99% of males read and write and
female’s
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females
female
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was
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were
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 5% less.
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, Latin America or Caribbean and
Arab
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states
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 witnessed a significant disparity,
while
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female’s
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females
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 in
Arab
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states
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 only accounted for 74% and boys were 10% more, males in Latin America or
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 consisted of well under 95%,
whereas
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female’s
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females
female
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 was 92%. regarding the other
regions
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where
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that
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 experienced a balance in literacy
rate
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.
in central
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In Central
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Asia
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, both genders made up exactly 98% of
literacy
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the literacy
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rate
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;
however
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, 96% of inhabitants in Central or Eastern Europe had
an
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the
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 ability
in reading
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to read
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 and
writing
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write
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words regions, asia, rate, arab, states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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