task 1: The illustrations show how chocolate is produced.

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The diagram illustrates all the steps by which chocolate is produced. In general, there are ten different stages in
this
procedure, the main process begins with the ripe red pods of the cocoa tree, followed by harvesting, fermentation, distribution and
finally
transportation and sale in factories to produce liquid chocolate. The technique begins
the
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cocoa
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tree
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, which is grown in South America, Africa and Indonesia. Once the pods are ripe and red, they are harvested and white cocoa
beans
are removed,
then
the
beans
are fermented and spread in the sun to dry. If
this
process is followed, the
beans
will be placed in large bags to be transported on different means of transportation, whether by train or truck. In the next step, the transport reaches the factory, there are
then
beans
roasted
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temperature of 350 degrees. If the
beans
are properly roasted, they will be crushed and the outer shell will be removed.
Finally
, the inner part is left is pressed and liquid chocolate is produced.
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coherence cohesion
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Provide a more detailed explanation of each step to enhance clarity. For example, describe more about the fermentation and drying process.
coherence cohesion
The essay follows a logical structure and the process is described clearly and systematically.
task achievement
You included all the main points in the procedure, such as harvesting, fermentation, and transportation.

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