Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no special knowledge of the following topic: News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. You should write at least 250 words.

The editorials choose what sort of information they are going to show
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, whether television or newspapers.
However
, we really do not know who is behind
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that choice. As everyone
know
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the
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information is power.
Firstly
,
last
years
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the population preferred to read newspapers,
due to
it was the way of knowing what it
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in the world. With the advances in
techonology
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technology
,
people
prefer to use
tv
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TV
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or their smartphone because
this
is faster and it has rapid access.
Nevertheless
, despite format
news
has changed, what
people
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do people
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desire to read? After some studios, the results reveal that bad
news
have
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more impact than good.
Therefore
, information mediums decide to offer more dramatic cases. Genetically,
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humans are configured to feel problems in their
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, so they are used to
leave
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constantly in
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trouble.
Consequently
. it is what the mediums show it. The
goverment
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government
might be behind
of
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all of
this
, because it is a way to control
people
.
However
, there are
people
who THINK that the most important thing is knowing what
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is happening in the world, including the worst
news
. In my case, I realised that I felt
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every time that I knew bad notices.
Therefore
, I decided not to read and listen
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news
few
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years ago. In conclusion, I assume that
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could be better if we focus on beautiful facts
instead
of what
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is wrong. We have our own problems in our
lifes
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and we would be happier keeping beautiful stuff.
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You address all parts of the task prompt, discussing what influences news editors' decisions, whether we become used to bad news, and the impact of reporting more good news.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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