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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts
explain
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 information about how much expense yearly was spent by
local
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the local
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 ministry in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000. The most significant facts to emerge are that
thegher
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higher
Higher
Education
 and K-12
Education
 dominated in all expenditure over the
periode
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period
while
 Environmental services had the lowest of expenses in
Someland
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Homeland
. Looking at the details,
the
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apply
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higher
education
, K-12
education
, health and human
resourses
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resources
 were the three largest expenditures
which
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and
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they
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stood at 35%, 25%, and 14% respectively
in1980
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in 1980
.
Next,
K-12
education
 decreased slowly to 20%.
Whereas
, the percentage of expenses
higher
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education
 and human
resourses
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resources
 had
steady
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a
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rising around 10% and 6% each in 2000.
On the other hand
, the number of transportation spending started at 16% in 1980.
Following
this
, it experienced a
decreasion
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decrease of
 about 6% in 1990. But in 2000,
there
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they
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 rose dramatically more than three times around 22%. Meanwhile, the environmental services and
other
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others
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 spent just under
one tenth
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one-tenth
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 from 1989 to 2000.
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