Many people in poor countries die from diseases that are curable because they cannot afford the medication required. Do you believe that drug companies should make their products available at reduced prices in these countries? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.
Our knowledge about medical science
have
come a long way, yet a lot of people die every year from diseases we have already Change the verb form
has
conquired
, just because they are from poor nations and they can not purchase expensive Correct your spelling
conquered
medications
. From my point of view, the pharmaceutical industries have a lot of works
to do to minimise Fix the agreement mistake
work
this
price tag, not only because of humanetarian
Correct your spelling
humanitarian
consideration
, but Fix the agreement mistake
considerations
also
for financial reason
.
Health is a basic human Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
necessacity
that a Correct your spelling
necessity
country
is required to provide for its citizen
. Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
However
, not all countries are in economically
sound position to maintain Add an article
an economically
this
obligation. Countless people die in these countries because, either they do not have the solvency to buy medications
, or their government do not have any social safety net such
as universal healthcare. In this
situations
, pharmaceutical Fix the agreement mistake
situation
companies
can play a vital role by providing patents of life saving
drugs for free or for very little money to the local pharmaceutical Add a hyphen
life-saving
companies
. For example
, one of the biggest companies
Pfizer is letting Ugandan companies
use their patent for insulin as a
African Aid program initiated by Change the article
an
World
Health Organization.
Providing cheap Correct article usage
the World
medications
not only improve
these Correct subject-verb agreement
improves
companies
Change noun form
companies'
reputation
, but Fix the agreement mistake
reputations
also
it
can be a future investment Correct pronoun usage
apply
on
a Change preposition
in
country
. Healthy
population is a prerequisite for a prosperous Add an article
A healthy
contry
. Correct your spelling
country
Contries
receiving these aids will not remain poor if their geo-political Correct your spelling
Countries
sitution
Correct your spelling
situation
remain
stable. Correct subject-verb agreement
remains
For instance
, Bangladesh had
been in the bracket of Lower Income Wrong verb form
has
Conuntries
since the Correct your spelling
countries
country
's birth. But in 2012 they decleared
they Correct your spelling
declared
are
financially stable Wrong verb form
were
to
Rephrase
enough to
promote
to Middle Income Wrong verb form
be promoted
Counries
and they will reach their goal by 2026. The Correct your spelling
countries
phamaceutical
Correct your spelling
pharmaceutical
companies
who have been providing them medications
at reduced price
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prices
,
are eager to enter a new market of 100 billion Remove the comma
apply
dollar
now.
To summarise, some Change to a plural noun
dollars
contries
face difficulties Correct your spelling
countries
to provide
proper health Change preposition
in providing
benefit
to their populations Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
due to
financial unstabilities
. Big pharmaceutical Correct your spelling
instabilities
country
can sell their products in
low Change preposition
at
price
to get them out of Fix the agreement mistake
prices
this
predicament. This
can guarantee the well being
of people Add a hyphen
well-being
as well as
the nation.Submitted by mostakahmedfaysal on
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text inaccuracy
Ensure subject-verb agreement throughout the essay. For example, "Our knowledge about medical science **have** come a long way" should be "Our knowledge about medical science **has** come a long way."
structure improvement
Separate the essay into clear paragraphs to improve readability and structure. Each paragraph should ideally convey a single idea or set of related ideas.
structure improvement
Clarify complex sentences to maintain reader engagement. For instance, the sentence "However, not all countries are in economically sound position to maintain this obligation" can be simplified for clarity.
content improvement
Provide a more explicit conclusion that summarizes your key points. Your current conclusion is good but can be made stronger with a restatement of the primary reasons supporting your view.
task response
The essay covers important aspects of the topic, including the role of pharmaceutical companies and specific country examples, which add depth and relevance.
introduction conclusion
The introduction and conclusion are effectively presented, clearly outlining your viewpoint and summarizing your argument.
relevant examples
The use of relevant specific examples, such as Pfizer's initiative in Uganda and Bangladesh's economic development, effectively supports your arguments.
logical structure
The essay demonstrates a clear line of thought, focusing on both ethical and practical reasons for pharmaceutical companies to reduce medication prices in poorer countries.