Many people in poor countries die from diseases that are curable because they cannot afford the medication required. Do you believe that drug companies should make their products available at reduced prices in these countries? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

Our knowledge about medical science
have
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come a long way, yet a lot of people die every year from diseases we have already
conquired
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conquered
, just because they are from poor nations and they can not purchase expensive
medications
. From my point of view, the pharmaceutical industries have a lot of
works
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to do to minimise
this
price tag, not only because of
humanetarian
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humanitarian
consideration
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considerations
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, but
also
for financial
reason
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reasons
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. Health is a basic human
necessacity
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necessity
that a
country
is required to provide for its
citizen
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citizens
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.
However
, not all countries are in
economically
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sound position to maintain
this
obligation. Countless people die in these countries because, either they do not have the solvency to buy
medications
, or their government do not have any social safety net
such
as universal healthcare. In
this
situations
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situation
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, pharmaceutical
companies
can play a vital role by providing patents of
life saving
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drugs for free or for very little money to the local pharmaceutical
companies
.
For example
, one of the biggest
companies
Pfizer is letting Ugandan
companies
use their patent for insulin as
a
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African Aid program initiated by
World
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Health Organization. Providing cheap
medications
not only
improve
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these
companies
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reputation
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, but
also
it
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can be a future investment
on
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a
country
.
Healthy
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population is a prerequisite for a prosperous
contry
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country
.
Contries
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Countries
receiving these aids will not remain poor if their geo-political
sitution
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situation
remain
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stable.
For instance
, Bangladesh
had
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been in the bracket of Lower Income
Conuntries
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countries
since the
country
's birth. But in 2012 they
decleared
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declared
they
are
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financially stable
to
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promote
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to Middle Income
Counries
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countries
and they will reach their goal by 2026. The
phamaceutical
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pharmaceutical
companies
who have been providing them
medications
at reduced
price
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prices
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,
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are eager to enter a new market of 100 billion
dollar
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now. To summarise, some
contries
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countries
face difficulties
to provide
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in providing
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proper health
benefit
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benefits
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to their populations
due to
financial
unstabilities
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instabilities
. Big pharmaceutical
country
can sell their products
in
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at
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low
price
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prices
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to get them out of
this
predicament.
This
can guarantee the
well being
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of people
as well as
the nation.
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text inaccuracy
Ensure subject-verb agreement throughout the essay. For example, "Our knowledge about medical science **have** come a long way" should be "Our knowledge about medical science **has** come a long way."
structure improvement
Separate the essay into clear paragraphs to improve readability and structure. Each paragraph should ideally convey a single idea or set of related ideas.
structure improvement
Clarify complex sentences to maintain reader engagement. For instance, the sentence "However, not all countries are in economically sound position to maintain this obligation" can be simplified for clarity.
content improvement
Provide a more explicit conclusion that summarizes your key points. Your current conclusion is good but can be made stronger with a restatement of the primary reasons supporting your view.
task response
The essay covers important aspects of the topic, including the role of pharmaceutical companies and specific country examples, which add depth and relevance.
introduction conclusion
The introduction and conclusion are effectively presented, clearly outlining your viewpoint and summarizing your argument.
relevant examples
The use of relevant specific examples, such as Pfizer's initiative in Uganda and Bangladesh's economic development, effectively supports your arguments.
logical structure
The essay demonstrates a clear line of thought, focusing on both ethical and practical reasons for pharmaceutical companies to reduce medication prices in poorer countries.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pharmaceuticals
  • Generic drugs
  • Patent laws
  • Healthcare disparity
  • Subsidies
  • Non-Governmental Organizations (NGOs)
  • Intellectual property
  • Epidemiology
  • Affordability
  • Global health initiatives
  • Corporate social responsibility
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