In many countries, truancy* is a worrying issue for both parents and educators. •What are the causes of truancy, and what may be the effects on the child and the wider community?

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Truancy is a huge problem and threat for both parents and teachers. There could
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many reasons why students like
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because they don't like the lessons or teachers or have an exact and reasonable cause. First things
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children can skip lessons because they are not
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the class or they dislike a teacher. Some children who like maths may not like literature.
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may be caused by toxic teachers who will try to fail students or just not
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them.
For instance
, in Ghana, one informatics teacher was so determined to teach his kids,
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that he drew
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computer on the blackboard to make them ready if they ever get in front of the real computer. From his words, literally not any student missed his class except for some serious reasons. Second things
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they could be in some trouble without letting their parents know. There could
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some causes from which young people miss their classes
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or someone could be traumatized and they visit some psychologists. I know, it may sound weird. But Gen Z
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likely
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some things without letting their parents know. In conclusion,
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issue is considered to be extremely dangerous.
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more attention to children and
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toxic towards them. I believe
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these actions will
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decrease
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the statistics of truancy a lot and eventually, fix the issue
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