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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 - 2017

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 - 2017
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The line chart compares the amount of
tourists
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 travelling to a specific
island
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 in the Caribbean, whether they stayed on cruise ships or on the
island
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 itself, from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of visiting
tourists
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 saw an upward trend.
Additionally
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, the
number
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 of
tourists
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 who stayed on the
island
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were
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 higher than those
that
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who
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 stayed on cruise ships for most of the period. In 2010, there were a
million
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 visitors to the
Island
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 before climbing to 2.5
million
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 after a four-year period when it continued its increasing trend to 3.5
million
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 by 2017. With regard to visitors staying on cruise ships, from 2010 to 2012, its
number
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 remained the same at 0.25
million
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 until, in 2013, began to rise gradually, ending the period with 2
million
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 visitors. The
number
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 of
tourists
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 staying on the
island
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 grew from 0.75
million
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 to 1.5
million
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 between 2010 and 2013 before plateauing until
in
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2016
where
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when
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 it dropped to nearly 1.25
million
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 before climbing back to 1.5
million
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 after one year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, island, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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