The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The graph shows
,
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apply
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the population
travelled
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travelling
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to
caribbran
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Caribbean
island
between 2010 and 2017, it
include
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includes
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the digits of tourists who stayed
at
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on
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cruise
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the cruise
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ship
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ships
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and on
island
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the island
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. In overview,
a
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the
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year
-by-
year
number of visitors were accelerated,
in addition
, mankind who stayed on water
vehicle
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vehicles
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are
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is
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lower
in contrast
to people who stayed on
the
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apply
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land
in
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on
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a
caribbean
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Caribbean
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island
till 2015, later it
had
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a
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apply
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vise
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versa.
In every
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Every
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year
, tourism
were risen
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rose
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gradually till the end of 2017.
Furthermore
, ship travellers are boosted up after the breakout of 2012 which was less than half a
million
,
till that
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it was
quite
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quite a
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crawl situation, in the same
way
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way,
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island
beings were exceeded after 2011. The count
were
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was
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bit
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a bit
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fewer
in
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at
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beginning
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the beginning
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of 2010, but later it
goes
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went
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beyond
in
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apply
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every
year
,
also
in the
year
2013, total
2
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of 2
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million
visitors visited
an
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the
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island
,
after
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and after
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that every
year
it
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apply
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sum-up of 0.5
million
pupils
on
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in
show examples
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the caribbean
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caribbean
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Caribbean
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. Surprisingly, in 2016, cruise
mans
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men
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were more than people who
kind
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were kind
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to stay on land at location.
Besides
, in 2017, boat
tripper
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trippers
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were half a
million
higher than individuals on
islet
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the islet
an islet
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. In conclusion, the crowd
were
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apply
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liked to visit on
enclave
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the enclave
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in years 2010 to 2017. Later, in
last
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the last
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few terms,
tourisms
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tourism
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were
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apply
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experienced
ship
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ships
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compared to land
area
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areas
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.

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