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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph gives historical data on the amount of people
to
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in
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 four international
museums
 from 1980 to 2015.
Overall
, it can be observed that
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the louvre
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louvre
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Louvre
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 was more popular compared to the others.
In addition
, all
the
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three
museums
 were close to each other in 1980 and the Vatican
gallery
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Gallery
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 overtook the London
science
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Science
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,
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 and Shenzhen
museums
. Turning to the details, Louvre has increased over the years and it achieved the highest number of visitors around 9,5
million
 in 1995.
Moreover
, it is interesting to note that
Vatican
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the Vatican
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 increased dramatically from 1980 to 2015 and reached 8,5
million
 people in 2015. As can be seen in the graph, Shenzhen, and London
museums
 had the same
tourists
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tourist
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 pattern between 1980 to 2000, in 2000 these
museums
 achieved 3,5
million
 in 2000. It is clear from the data that Shenzhen
museum
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Museum
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 from 2000 to 2015 was
increasd
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increased
 gradually between 3,5
million
 to 4
million
 people,
whereas
 London
science museum
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Science Museum
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 has dropped over the
last
 period from 3,5
million
 in 2000 to 2
million
 in 2015.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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