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Every country in the world has its own road rules, but many drivers don’t obey them. What do you think are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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 of
drivers
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 throughout the world
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 not follow the
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rules
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regardless
 of the country they are driving in.
This
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people
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 are not obeying the
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 and potential actions to be taken that could help solve the issue.
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 with, it is crucial to mention that the driving style largely depends on the country and its society. Some nations generally respect and follow the
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 more than
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others.
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, it is a well-known fact that in Asian countries the traffic conditions and the
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 behaviour of
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 on the
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hectic
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, local traditions and norms can severely
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influence
 the driving style of the population.
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, bad driving style can be caused by not having strict enough
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 and high enough fines. By
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, in certain countries, where
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 understand they will not suffer from any dramatic consequences, they can be breaking the
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. To solve
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 problem, a number of measures could be taken.
Firsly
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Firstly
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 safety cameras need to be installed.
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 will help to track driving violations and prevent
people
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 from breaking the
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, as they will know they are being watched.
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, higher fines need to be introduced, so that
drivers
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 will be more likely to obey the
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 to avoid paying the premium.
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, it would be effective to come up with a
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, where
drivers
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 would lose points every time they
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 the law, which could result in the
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 license being suspended for a certain period of time.
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this
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 essay covered some of the reasons
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drivers
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 breaking the
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rules
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 and discussed a couple of solutions on how to prevent them
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 doing so.
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coherence cohesion
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